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Friday, October 22, 2010

Ocean of Gold

Author's Note: This poem was originally a stream of consciousness, and started out with the word Field. I immediately thought of a sports field, and made a face. I tried to think of some other kind of field I would enjoy writing about, and imagined a wide open field, filled with tall grass, like in one of those super-dramatic perfume commercials. I wanted to give it a really personal feel, and I hope I accomplished that. Enjoy!


Whoosh-
The wind blows across the tall grass
Tickling my face
                      My ears
                              My fingertips;
My world has become an ocean of gold,
With the blue sky above.

I walk through the path
             My path
Thinking about nothing in particular
Because the sweet smell of earth fills my senses.
I brush my palms across the grass,
And it feels like I'm somewhere far from here.

I look back,
Seeing only light footprints of where I have stepped,
Looking forward-to where I will go
It is comforting, knowing I am not taking anything from here,
for this place is complete.
 
A green space opens up in front of me,
begging me to run through it
And down the hill like only a child knows how.
I give in,
and soon, my feet are taking me
faster
         faster,
until I fly down,
the wind rushing past me,
and a smile on my face.

when I finally find the will to stop,
                  I fall
and stare at the sky above,
   The endless sky-
which seems so full of possibilities, stares back,
until it seems to swallow me whole,
to a place only to be described as heaven.

4 comments:

  1. This is really good the way you spaced it really does help with the vision it places in your mind. It is really intriguing the way you started out with wind and the sky go off onto some other topics then return to the sky and heaven it does a very good job of linking it together.

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  2. This is a very good poem. I like the way you described everything, the grass, what you were doing and so on... I think that you accomplished what you wanted to. :-)

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  3. This seemed like this poem did have a personal touch to it so I think you accomplished that. I almost seems that it would be a memory from your childhood. Good job!!

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  4. I love this poem. I like how you spaced it, and you did a really good job of creating a clear picture in the readers head. Nice job Sophie!

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