Author's Note: This journal Entry was one of the first ones I have written this year about my perspection on an ocean
The blanket of blue stretches beyond eyes view, I look left, right, and again searching for something other then the rippling water. A salty sent wafts through my sences, and I tilt my head up to the sky, letting the sun pour in and on me. Splash! A monster- like fish jumps up to grab its dinner, which makes me shudder, for I feel for the sharks food, who was happily grazing the crisp blue water, carefree until its last breath. The seagulls mock eachother, I laugh, and wonder what they are thinking. A fresh wave rolls through the ocean, towering above everything else. I feel the power and shrink back beneath its force. This is beauty in its own right.
It has a very poetic voice to it which is a good thing. Well done and you capture the moment well.
ReplyDeleteI don't have words for how great this poem is.
ReplyDeleteI like how you described nature, it's fitting.
ReplyDeleteWhat do you mean by fitting?
ReplyDeleteYour good at writing peoms!! I like how you descibe the scene around you! Good job!
ReplyDeleteThis is really good, your voice is amazing. I honestly can't think of anything to change about it.
ReplyDeleteAlso, it kind of seems like you have had this moment before its that good.
ReplyDeleteI really liked it. Your voice was very strong and was also very descriptive. Good job:)
ReplyDeleteWOW SOPHIE!!! I LOVE IT!!!! You really know how to set a reader in a scene. I love the last line, "This is beauty in its own right." absolutely beautiful.
ReplyDeleteThis is superr good. Left me speachless. plus, i love the shark part(;
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